You know, I think skimming the nsfw bit really helped it. Helped sell the drunken bit, and didn’t distract by me trying to make it sexy.
I also realized that the protag doesn’t have a gender, or any description what so ever, and all he has is a pronoun. I think I might play with vagueness some more, it feels tight.
And you have now posted Literature Cafe’s first writing prompt response.
I like it. The drunken blood pact, the hangover, and the slowly dawning regret… they all make the setting seem real.
You know, I think skimming the nsfw bit really helped it. Helped sell the drunken bit, and didn’t distract by me trying to make it sexy.
I also realized that the protag doesn’t have a gender, or any description what so ever, and all he has is a pronoun. I think I might play with vagueness some more, it feels tight.