The premise is interesting, has potential as a work of fiction but yeah the writing is awful. I kind of like how there isn’t really any stakes. The characters think there are big important stakes but basically nothing really bad would happen if they failed. I wish it had stayed like that and the main villain hadn’t basically decided to kill a bunch of kids, and an entire city block of innocent people, over what he’s essentially a hostile business takeover.
The premise is interesting, has potential as a work of fiction but yeah the writing is awful. I kind of like how there isn’t really any stakes. The characters think there are big important stakes but basically nothing really bad would happen if they failed. I wish it had stayed like that and the main villain hadn’t basically decided to kill a bunch of kids, and an entire city block of innocent people, over what he’s essentially a hostile business takeover.